The graph shows the average Japanese month salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period.

The graph shows the average Japanese month salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period.
The graph illustrates the comparison of
television
prices
in particular
versions, black white and
colors
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televisions, and the monthly salary of Japanese which is represented in
Yen
between 1953 to 1983.
Overall
, it is evident that the average salary had an upward trend,
whereas
the
television
prices for both
color
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versions showed
a downward shifts
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during
this
period. In 1953, the average income of Japanese people was just below 40
Yen
.
However
, it exhibited a gradual increase to around 60
Yen
by 1963. It
then
continued to grow significantly to about 100
Yen
by 1968 before reaching its peak
to
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around 180
Yen
by the end of the period.
In contrast
, in 1953, the price of
colored
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television
stood at 100
Yen
before gradually falling to nearly 40
Yen
by 1968.
This
figure experienced a slight decrease to just below 40
Yen
by 1973.
On the other hand
, the black and white
television
was not available until 1958 and it had a high price, amounting to 180
Yen
, in the first year it appeared. The figure remarkably dropped to almost 100
Yen
by 1963, and it steadily decreased to around 80
Yen
by 1973.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words television, yen with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.

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