The graph shows the average Japanese month salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period.

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The graph illustrates the comparison of

television

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prices

in particular

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versions, black white and

colors

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color

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televisions, and the monthly salary of Japanese which is represented in

Yen

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between 1953 to 1983.

Overall

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, it is evident that the average salary had an upward trend,

whereas

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the

television

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prices for both

color

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colour

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versions showed

a downward shifts

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a downward shift

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during

this

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period. In 1953, the average income of Japanese people was just below 40

Yen

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However

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, it exhibited a gradual increase to around 60

Yen

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by 1963. It

then

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continued to grow significantly to about 100

Yen

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by 1968 before reaching its peak

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around 180

Yen

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by the end of the period.

In contrast

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, in 1953, the price of

colored

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coloured

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television

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stood at 100

Yen

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before gradually falling to nearly 40

Yen

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by 1968.

This

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figure experienced a slight decrease to just below 40

Yen

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by 1973.

On the other hand

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, the black and white

television

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was not available until 1958 and it had a high price, amounting to 180

Yen

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, in the first year it appeared. The figure remarkably dropped to almost 100

Yen

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by 1963, and it steadily decreased to around 80

Yen

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by 1973.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words television, yen with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

194 words

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