The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996.

The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996.
The line graph provides information about the number of
noise
complaints
made
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received by Environmental Health authorities in Newtown
city
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from 1980 to 1996. In 1980, the highest number of
complaints
is
road
works
, with over 600, the
fewest
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lowest
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is traffic
noise
, with fewer than 400.
However
, by 1996,
road
works
complaints
had dropped dramatically to almost naught,
domestic
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and domestic
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household
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households
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became the largest
noise
problems with 1200. It is interesting that between 1980 and 1988, both domestic household and traffic
noise
followed a similar trend, each declined
around
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100, and both rose after 1988 until 1996.
Road
works
and factories have opposite trends,
road
works
dropped dramatically,
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at over 600 to near zero, meanwhile, factories grew smoothly, increased
about
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200.
Overall
.
it is clear that
the total volume of
complaints
increased over the period, with domestic
household
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households
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seeing the largest rise, and
road
works
has
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having
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the
most
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sharp decline close to zero.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, complaints, road, works with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Complaints
  • Environmental Health authorities
  • Noise pollution
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Trend
  • Spikes
  • Fluctuations
  • Time frame
  • Population growth
  • Industrial development
  • Public awareness
  • Implications
  • Addressing the issue
  • Data analysis
  • Year-on-year changes
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