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The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996.

The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996.
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The line graph provides information about the number of
noise
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complaints
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made
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received by Environmental Health authorities in Newtown
city
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 from 1980 to 1996. In 1980, the highest number of
complaints
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 is
road
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works
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, with over 600, the
fewest
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lowest
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 is traffic
noise
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, with fewer than 400.
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, by 1996,
road
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works
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complaints
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 had dropped dramatically to almost naught,
domestic
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and domestic
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household
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households
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 became the largest
noise
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 problems with 1200. It is interesting that between 1980 and 1988, both domestic household and traffic
noise
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 followed a similar trend, each declined
around
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 100, and both rose after 1988 until 1996.
Road
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works
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 and factories have opposite trends,
road
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works
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 dropped dramatically,
start
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 at over 600 to near zero, meanwhile, factories grew smoothly, increased
about
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 200.
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.
it is clear that
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 the total volume of
complaints
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 increased over the period, with domestic
household
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households
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 seeing the largest rise, and
road
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works
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has
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having
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 the
most
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apply
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sharp decline close to zero.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, complaints, road, works with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Complaints
  • Environmental Health authorities
  • Noise pollution
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Trend
  • Spikes
  • Fluctuations
  • Time frame
  • Population growth
  • Industrial development
  • Public awareness
  • Implications
  • Addressing the issue
  • Data analysis
  • Year-on-year changes
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