The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The bar chart illustrates how usually
people
ate junk food
in the United States in the range years
2003 and 2013.
Overall
, citizens of the USA in 2003 ate often more fast food
than others in two years
with average
percentage of 27. Correct article usage
an average
While
the percentage of residents in 2006 lead in 3 years
.
In all three years
, people
did not prefer to eat fast food
every day. More precisely under 5%. However
, approximately one
-third of people
in three years
were interested in eating unhealthy food
at least one
time in one
week. With the same situation, residents ate junk food
one
or two times in one
month. Furthermore
, while
in 2006 this
situation was the lowest, the number of people
was one
-fourth.
The amount
of citizens, who ate Change the quantifier
number
same
Correct article usage
the same
food
a few times in one
year was below or exactly 15% in 2003 and 2006,2013 respectively. The lowest percentage of people
who did not ate
fast Change the verb form
eat
food
was the same as people
which
ate unhealthy Correct pronoun usage
who
food
every single day.Submitted by bizhanalikhan6 on
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