The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The given line graph illustrates the attendance at various activities at
at
centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 Correct your spelling
a
to
2020.
A glance at the graph reveals that the major contribution of members held by the film club where depicted by more than 60 individuals throughout the whole period. Correct word choice
and
Moreover
, there was a fluctuating trend for material arts preference which was started by approximately 35 participants and ended at nearly the same.
In 2010, participation in Amateur dramatics and table tennis was demonstrated a similar number of 20. Linking Words
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, after 2010, the attendance of Amateur dramatic activity has revealed a rapid growth. Linking Words
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table tennis participation has indicated the opposite trend by decreasing merely up to 10 members.
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In addition
to that, there was not even a member involved in musical performance until the year 2005. Linking Words
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, it presented a Linking Words
slightly
increase of just over 15 members in 2020.Change the adverb
slight
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