The graph shows the average Japanese month salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period.

The graph shows the average Japanese month salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period.
The chart gives information on the average Japanese monthly income for individuals (
Yen
) from 1953 to 1983 and the prices of black and white televisions and the colour during the time. 
Overall
, it seems that the monthly salary is increasing at a high rate eventually, and coloured
TV
has gone down, and the same with Black and white
TV
although
in a different number.
To begin
with, a monthly salary in 1953 was almost between 20
yen
and 40
yen
, and after that, it increased to exactly 40
yen
in 1958, and it showed more growth in the rate in 1963, reaching 60
yen
and eventually ending with 180
yen
in 1973.
However
, the coloured
TV
was the opposite, starting in 1958 at 180
yen
and decreasing after that, reaching 110
yen
in 1963 and, after five years, becoming 100
yen
and in 1973, it was 90
yen
.
Moreover
, The black and white
TV
in 1953 was 100
yen
and went down to 80 in 1958
however
, in 1963, it reached the same number as the monthly salary, which was 60
yen
, from 1968 until 1973, decreasing to 40
yen
.
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