As more and more information is available online, the role of textbooks has become obsolete. Therefore, universities should replace traditional books with digital materials. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Now, everyone can get information from anywhere and whenever. Because of
this
, university
can change traditional Fix the agreement mistake
universities
books
into digital books
. Some of them think because the physical books
have been too old. Despite all of the advantages of the
online Correct article usage
apply
books
, I argue that digital materials is
predominantly disadvantageous to Change the verb form
are
the
students and lecturers. Correct article usage
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This
will be depicted by looking at how online books
can reducing
the interest of reading literacy and the feeling when reading online Wrong verb form
reduce
books
is not as happy as reading traditional books
.
First,
people will have a low reading literacy when they read digital materials. For example
, my friend were
using Kindle to read online Change the verb form
was
books
, she did it for a long time. After one year ahead, she felt there was something wrong with her eyes. Then
, she went to the doctor and as can be expected, she had bad eyesight. She told this
experience to all of her book club communities. After that, they decided to not using
online Wrong verb form
use
books
anymore. So, online books
will decrease the
reading literacy.
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In addition
to this
, the sense when reading online and offline books
is totally different. For example
, I am a book lover and every time I read physical books
, I really enjoyed
it. Wrong verb form
enjoy
This
is because I can smell the pages of the books
. Not only that,
but Remove the comma
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also
I can marked
with Change the verb form
mark
be marked
colorful
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colourful
at
sentences which Change preposition
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related
to me. Wrong verb form
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Furthermore
, in my house, there is a small library and I am saving
all of Wrong verb form
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books
that I Add an article
the books
had
read. It is something that Wrong verb form
have
more
valuable Add a missing verb
is more
as
book lovers Change preposition
for
while
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than
books
enjoyers can notChange the noun form
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do
.
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To conclude
, even though people can use online books
, but
the drawbacks Correct word choice
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is
more outweigh Change the verb form
are
than
the merits. Change preposition
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Thus
, Add an article
the university
a university
university
must not Fix the agreement mistake
universities
transforming
physical Change the verb form
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be transforming
books
with
digital novels.Change preposition
into
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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical structure by ensuring each paragraph flows naturally from one idea to the next. Use more linking phrases and transitions to make your argument clearer.
task achievement
Clarify your main arguments and avoid repetition. Make sure your key points are distinct and well-supported. For instance, the idea that digital materials reduce reading literacy should be linked more closely to the argument.
task achievement
Enhance your use of specific examples and details to support your points. Your personal anecdotes are good but could be complemented with more general data or studies if possible.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which contributes to meeting the criteria for structure.
task achievement
You provide relevant specific examples (e.g., your friend's experience with Kindle) to illustrate your points.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear stance on the topic, making your position understood.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...