The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart and table illustrate and compare the financial
aid
distributed for three different
field
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fields
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and allocated to four countries in 1974 and 40 years later. Catering had the largest difference between these 40 years. It took 70
million
in 1974, and only 16
millions
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million
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in 2014. Medicine
occupty
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occupy
occupies
the largest portion of investment in 1974, which cost 80
millions
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million
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,
while
decrease
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decreased
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by 20 to 2014. In the aspect of finance, it took
same
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the same
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amount
of money as catering at the beginning,
whereas
only
decline
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declined
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to 65
million
that
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which
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is the biggest part in 2014. In terms of the specific countries, South Africa always received the largest
aid
, which
got
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reached
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65
million
in 1974 and still received 42
million
after four decades. China got the second largest
amount
of financial
aid
at the start that obtained 62
million
, but in 2014, there
was
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were
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only 6
million
allocated, which is the country
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that reveived
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reveived
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received
the smallest part of financial
aid
. Indonesia and
Tailand
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Thailand
were in the middle position
that
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apply
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reveived
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received
55
million
and 48
million
in 1974 and 30
million
and 18
million
in 2014
recepectively
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respectively
.
To sum up
, the highest financial
aid
cost was Medcine in 1974
,
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and
was
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Finance in 2014. Catering had the biggest
defference
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difference
gap across the 40 years. South Africa always received the largest
amount
of
aid
,
while
China saw the sharpest drop in the
amount
of
aid
it has
reveived
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received
.
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