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The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart and table illustrate and compare the financial
aid
 distributed for three different
field
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fields
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 and allocated to four countries in 1974 and 40 years later. Catering had the largest difference between these 40 years. It took 70
million
 in 1974, and only 16
millions
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million
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 in 2014. Medicine
occupty
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occupy
occupies
 the largest portion of investment in 1974, which cost 80
millions
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million
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,
while
decrease
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decreased
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 by 20 to 2014. In the aspect of finance, it took
same
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the same
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amount
 of money as catering at the beginning,
whereas
 only
decline
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declined
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 to 65
million
that
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which
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 is the biggest part in 2014. In terms of the specific countries, South Africa always received the largest
aid
, which
got
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reached
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 65
million
 in 1974 and still received 42
million
 after four decades. China got the second largest
amount
 of financial
aid
 at the start that obtained 62
million
, but in 2014, there
was
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were
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 only 6
million
 allocated, which is the country
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that reveived
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reveived
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received
 the smallest part of financial
aid
. Indonesia and
Tailand
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Thailand
 were in the middle position
that
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apply
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reveived
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received
 55
million
 and 48
million
 in 1974 and 30
million
 and 18
million
 in 2014
recepectively
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respectively
.
To sum up
, the highest financial
aid
 cost was Medcine in 1974
,
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apply
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 and
was
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apply
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Finance in 2014. Catering had the biggest
defference
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difference
 gap across the 40 years. South Africa always received the largest
amount
 of
aid
 ,
while
 China saw the sharpest drop in the
amount
 of
aid
 it has
reveived
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received
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words aid, million, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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