The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart and table illustrate and compare the financial
aid
distributed for three different field
and allocated to four countries in 1974 and 40 years later.
Catering had the largest difference between these 40 years. It took 70 Change to a plural noun
fields
million
in 1974, and only 16 millions
in 2014. Medicine Change to singular
million
occupty
the largest portion of investment in 1974, which cost 80 Correct your spelling
occupy
occupies
millions
, Change to singular
million
while
decrease
by 20 to 2014. In the aspect of finance, it took Wrong verb form
decreased
same
Change the article
the same
amount
of money as catering at the beginning, whereas
only decline
to 65 Wrong verb form
declined
million
that
is the biggest part in 2014.
In terms of the specific countries, South Africa always received the largest Correct pronoun usage
which
aid
, which got
65 Verb problem
reached
million
in 1974 and still received 42 million
after four decades. China got the second largest amount
of financial aid
at the start that obtained 62 million
, but in 2014, there was
only 6 Correct subject-verb agreement
were
million
allocated, which is the country Correct pronoun usage
that reveived
reveived
the smallest part of financial Correct your spelling
received
aid
. Indonesia and Tailand
were in the middle position Correct your spelling
Thailand
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
reveived
55 Correct your spelling
received
million
and 48 million
in 1974 and 30 million
and 18 million
in 2014 recepectively
.
Correct your spelling
respectively
To sum up
, the highest financial aid
cost was Medcine in 1974,
and Remove the comma
apply
was
Finance in 2014. Catering had the biggest Unnecessary verb
apply
defference
gap across the 40 years. South Africa always received the largest Correct your spelling
difference
amount
of aid
, while
China saw the sharpest drop in the amount
of aid
it has reveived
.Correct your spelling
received
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