Many people around the world use social media to keep in touch with other people and get the news. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.
In the ancient days,
people
used to send and receive messages by pigeon. Nowadays, people
are using digital media
to keep in touch with their near and dear. Many people
argue that keeping in touch with relatives has disadvantages, while
others believe that media
plays a vital role in bringing communities close and getting information immediately. This
essay will discuss why using social media
brings more benefits and advantages outweigh its disadvantages. I will give my personal example to clarify how it is useful.
On the one hand, delivers messages immediately all over the world. The main benefit is social media
connects with their friends and relatives in seconds. For example
, many students are studying all over the world and they communicate with the help of Facebook and WhatsApp applications to get news
from them. So, it saves time
and money instead
visit them personally. Another reason is, that in emergencies, people
send messages and save themselves and other people
from upcoming disasters, such
as T-sunami and COVID-19, at that time
social media
helped people
to know about safety.
On the other hand
, certainly, social media
brings many advantages, and there are some outcomes it brings. The primary factor is it creates unnecessary stress. For instance
, some people
are scared and depressed after they see the news
on the Internet, like, war news
, which is still going on between Russia and Ukraine, as a result
, some people
suffer from heart attacks. Another outcome is it wastes time
and money, many channels are paid and subscription needs to be bought. In addition
, many people
have become addicted to the news
. In my case, I still spend many hours a week watching social media
, even though I do not need this
news
and sometimes it brings stress and violence to society.
In conclusion, following the analysis of the advantages of news
and the disadvantages of how it affects our lives, it is clear, that excessive watching of the news
brings obesity and anxiety, which results in health issues and a waste of time
and money. However
, if watching is limited it brings productive information which increases our knowledge and the well-being of our families and friends.Submitted by rbtech65 on
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task achievement
Your response is quite comprehensive but could be more precise. For instance, avoid starting with 'In the ancient days...' which seems overly broad and less relevant to the specific task prompt.
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Try to make the essay more balanced by giving equal weight to both advantages and disadvantages. This will make your argument more persuasive and comprehensive.
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Use more specific and varied vocabulary to articulate your points clearly and avoid repetition.
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Your essay provides a clear and relevant response to the task, covering both advantages and disadvantages of social media usage.
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The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, making your essay structured and easier to follow.