The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts depict the generation of
electricity
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in
Germany
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compared to
France
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from all renewables and sources in 2009. It is measured in billion kWh.
Overall
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, there are some differences between the two countries.
Firstly
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,
Germany
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generated the most
electricity
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by conventional thermal at 59.6 per
cent
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. Followed by nuclear at 23 per
cent
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and 17.4 per
cent
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Renewables including Biomass at 39.3 per
cent
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, Wind power at 36.9 per
cent
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, Hydroelectric at 17.7 per
cent
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and
also
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Solar at 6.1 per
cent
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consecutively.
However
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, The generation of
electricity
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in
France
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was different from
Germany
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. The first-ranked of
France
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's
electricity
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source is Nuclear at 76 per
cent
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, which is one-third of all sources. Followed by Renewable at 13.7 per
cent
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, which includes Hydroelectric at 80.5 per
cent
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, Wind at 10.5 per
cent
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, Biomass at 8.1 per
cent
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and Solar at just 0.9 per
cent
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, which is the lowest figure. The
last
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-ranked is Conventional Thermal at 10.3 per
cent
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. Meanwhile, the
electricity
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generation of
Germany
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and
France
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have the same trend. The
electricity
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generated by Geothermal was not popular in both two countries. The given information depicts the number of Geothermal at 0.0 per
cent
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.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, germany, france, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "depict" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity generation
  • renewable sources
  • conventional thermal
  • nuclear power
  • hydroelectric power
  • biomass
  • wind energy
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • significant
  • contributor
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