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Band 2.5

Million of dollars are spent on space every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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in recent years some global
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space
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 think we should spend it on more useful things.
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 money let`s agree on
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over spending
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 on useless things that what can make some noise for
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other countries
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USA
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NASA
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year by year
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 of dollars,on the side way we look at
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people angry and they use the(we should spend it on improving living standards)
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 of dollars any big company like
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 have scientists and smart people maybe they did research on
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space
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 and unknown world so with the technology maybe they found
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some thing
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all dollars
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politics have
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 on it so we know nothing.
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Examples
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Conclusion
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Formal Language
Avoid using informal language such as 'let's agree on this.' Instead, use more formal language to maintain an academic tone.
Introduction
You introduce the topic and state your opinion clearly, which is a good start.
Multiple Perspectives
You touch upon different perspectives, which shows that you have considered multiple viewpoints.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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