The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
The graph illustrates
number
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a number
the number
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of
shops
that have been shut down and started in a country over the period of seven
years
from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, it is obvious that starting new
shops
were
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significantly declined
while
closure
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the closure
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of
stores
slightly decreased with a sharp drop over the
years
.
According to
the information given, approximately 6,500
shops
were closed in 2011 and it reached
to
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roughly 7,100 after two
years
. In 2015,
number
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the number
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of closed
shops
were
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sharply decreased by about 500
shops
.
However
, next year 5,100
stores
were shut down which is ten times more compared to
previous
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the previous
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year.
Then
, it remained steady until 2018 when about 5,200 stopped to serve for customers.
By contrast
, around 8,500 new
shops
were opened in
in
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2011 which was
peak
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the peak
a peak
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for
next
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the next
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seven
years
. After a year, amount of
new
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newly
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opened
stores
went down significantly by only 4,000 new
shops
were started.
Number
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A number
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of
opening
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new
stores
saw its
secon
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second
peak in 2014 when 6,100
shops
were opened and steadily declined until 2018
by
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with
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opening
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the opening
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of only 3,000 new
stores
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, years, stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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