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The table below shows the percentage of first year students who gave "very good" rating to the resources provided by the college, for three courses. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting, the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage of first year students who gave "very good" rating to the resources provided by the college, for three courses. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting, the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#percentage #first #year #students #resources #college #three #courses #information #features #comparisons
The table illustrates the proportion of freshmen having the highest level
satisfaction
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of satisfaction
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about
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 the university's
resources
 for three different subjects namely
Economics
,
Commerce
 and
Law
.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that
Commerce
 received the most positive feedback among
three
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the three
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 given courses. It is
also
 worth noting that
students
 showed the most
interst
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interest
 in teaching and
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tutoring
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,
while
 the other
resources
' rates collected more diverse feedback. To be more specific, regarding teaching and
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tutoring
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,
first year
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students
 showed higher
satisfaction
 for
Economics
 and
Commerce
 than
Law
.
Furthermore
, there was 95% of
students
 who were pleased with teaching in
Economics
 and
Commerce
,
while
 that of
Law
 was 62%. The same pattern can be observed in the rate of
satisfaction
about
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tutor
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tutors
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 in
Economics
 and
Commerce
,
that
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which
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 received 90% and 93% respectively. Meanwhile,
tutor
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the tutor
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 resource of
Law
 was less well-received by
students
,
specificly
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specifically
 at 76%. In terms of pre-course information,
resources
 in printing and
the
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others, freshmen expressed more
satisfaction
 for
Commerce
 than those of
Economics
 and
Law
, all the rates in
Commerce
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the Commerce
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 course were higher than 80%. It is noted that there were only 59% and 60%
students
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of students
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who
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gave positive
rating
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ratings
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 to the pre-course information and other
resources
 in
Economics
 respectively. Regarding the
resources
 in printing, the figure for the number of
students
 rating it excellent was 82% in
Economics
 and 70% in
Law
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words satisfaction, resources, economics, commerce, law, students, tutor with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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