The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the amount of financial aid that four nations received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagrams depict
the
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information about financial aid from four
countires
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countries
counties
and the
spent
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of its in 1974 and 2014,
categoried
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categorised
categorized
by
facility
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.
Overall
, the
amount
of financial aid
of
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every
nations
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experienced a significant reduction in 2014 compared with 1974, especially
Chain
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China
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which had to
be
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the second in
term
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of
amount
in 1974. Notably, catering had the most
draw down
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compared to
other type
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. In 1974, The monetary support in South Africa
had
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more than 65
million
which is the highest
amount
throughout the period, followed by China with 62
million
.
Althrough
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, Indonesia and Thailand only
accouted
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accounted
for third and
forth
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place in,
figured
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55 and 48
million
, respectively. In 2014,
China
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financial aid had plummeted to 6
million
which is the lowest
amount
througout
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throughout
the period. Meanwhile, monetary support distribution in financial and medicine experienced insignificant draw down
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5 and 20
million
, respectively. Catering experienced a massive
decreased
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more
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than 55
million
from 70
million
to just 15
million
in 40
years
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time.
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