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The pictures of pie charts and table show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.

The pictures of pie charts and table show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.
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The graph and the table provide information about the average salary and the spending of money on food and clothes by an average family in a city in Britain from 2010 to 2013.
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, the salary decreased, but the spending shows an increase
However
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, the percentages on the table do not show a huge difference in rate for both the two years.
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 with, the income was 29000 in 2010 and went down to 25000 in 2013, which decreased by 4000, the spending on food and clothes was 14000 in 2010 and went up to 15000 in 2013.
Moreover
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, the percentages of spending on stuff give similar rates in both years, starting with fruits and vegetables, which in 2010 was 26% and increased to 30% in 2013, and
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 led to meat and fish in 2010 was 29% and decreased by 6% to become 23%, dairy products show increasing in 2010 was 12% and became 16% in 2013, after that the other kinds of food which stayed the same in rate. Eventually, clothes in 2010 were 15% and went down a little to 13% in 2013.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average income
  • spending habits
  • proportion
  • cost of living
  • economic changes
  • cultural factors
  • standard of living
  • economic health
  • leftover income
  • savings
  • expenses
  • financial trends
  • value for money
  • economic forecasts
  • significant increase/decrease
  • spending patterns
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