The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The tables compare the number of
people
who were satisfied visiting the
Ashdown
Museum
during the year before and after it was refurbished.
Overall
, there was a difference between the results of the surveys about the
visitors
Change to a genitive case
visitor's
visitors'
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satisfaction when visiting the
Ashdown
Museum
. The majority of
people
who visited the
Ashdown
Museum
were dissatisfied with their experience. but, after the year of the refurbishment of
Ashdown
Museum
, most of them felt satisfied. Before the
Ashdown
museum
was refurbished, 40% of the
visitors
claimed to feel dissatisfied with their visit.
In contrast
, 30% of them felt satisfied and there were 15% of
people
who felt very satisfied.
While
10% of them were very dissatisfied, 5% of the
visitors
remained silent. After the refurbishment, the number of
visitors
who were satisfied increased to 40% and 35% of them really liked the experience. there were
visitors
who were still dissatisfied with the
museum
, and both
people
who were very dissatisfied and had no response
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
at 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, ashdown, museum, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refurbishment
  • Satisfaction level
  • Appeal
  • Offerings
  • Survey
  • Correlation
  • Proportion
  • Pre-refurbishment
  • Post-refurbishment
  • Visitor experience
  • Dissatisfied
  • Visitor engagement
  • Survey methodology
  • Overall trend
  • Impact
  • Attract
  • Please
  • Museums
  • Analysis
  • Shifts
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