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In some countries, more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this question? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is observed that
people
 are keen on learning the history of the
house
 or building.
This
 essay will explain the causes behind
this
 phenomenon First of all, for home buyers,
this
 is very important because they need to know whether
this
house
 has ever had major events that affect their personal lives or not. Or maybe their previous owner had that kind of personality because no one wants to live in a
house
 that used to belong to a bad person. They
also
 want to find out if the residents in the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 are friendly enough and have the type of character fit with new owners.
On the other hand
, for the living, especially teenagers. Most of the land houses will BE passed down, possibly from their parents or from many previous generations. Human nature is inherently curious, so it is not wrong for them to be curious about the
house
 they live in. They are curious about what the
house
 they live in was like in the past, and what the
people
 who lived in the past were like. Learning about the history of the
house
 is a satisfying way for them. Back in the 80s and 90s, some houses had extra basements or secret rooms built in Europe and America. On one side, because of the war, they needed to build them to hide. Another side is that they built them to store important items. Those basements are often associated with haunted things through movies that we often see, but their authenticity is not high. Nowadays, you can see some videos about discovering basements or secret rooms on the internet,
this
 has been reacted to by many
people
. They are impressed with it because most of them have only seen it in movies or in books and
also
 come from many
people
 who love ghost movies and are interested in them.
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You have addressed the prompt accurately by discussing reasons people are interested in the history of their homes and methods they might use to research this.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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