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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided graph illustrates the amount of
exports
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 which Australia made to 4 countries in 22 years
period
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 from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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,
the
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exports
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 to China increased significantly and
exports
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 to Japan decreased over the years. The
exports
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 made to China started
with
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 just around 1% in 1990,
this
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number
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 continued growing and reached about 10% in 2005. The
exports
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 increased drastically until the end of the
period
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 with just above a quarter.
In contrast
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,
exports
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 to Japan began with the highest
number
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 of
exports
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 which was a little more than a quarter.
This
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number
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 continued dropping and reached
to
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roughly 17% by 2012.
Exports
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 to
US
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the US
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 and India fluctuated during the
period
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. India had a similar starting
number
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with
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 China. It remained steady until 2000. Over the next ten years, there was an upward trend.
However
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, it declined to only 5% by 2012.
Lastly
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, the US had the second highest
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 at the beginning with 12% of
exports
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, but it fluctuated and reached only 7%
at the end
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 of the
period
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, period, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • fluctuate
  • steady increase/decrease
  • notable rise/drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • export destinations
  • trade relations
  • upsurge
  • downturn
  • economic ties
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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