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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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In our rather futuristic society for a number of reasons
people
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 are getting more interested in the past of their hometowns. With the help of rapidly ameliorating technology their
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history can be easily put into
life
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. But what are the roots of
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 an eagerness? First of all, the hectic lifestyle that we all experience nowadays does not leave any space for calmness and peace in our souls, so most
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the
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people
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 - especially
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 - are struggling with finding their feet, whilst having a broad spectrum of knowledge about the world around really gives a feeling of confidence in the impermanence of
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 to
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, it is said that being aware of the past
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can change the future.
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, if
people
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 want to live a better
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 in
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 comfortable environment, they have to explore the history of their homes in order not to repeat past mistakes. For
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 aims we are lucky to have multiple tools to carry out research
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convenient
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 learning, there are
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 quite a few books and magazines which are not available online but which are extremely helpful
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local interests. News, photos, articles and interviews with different
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 published in old magazines indeed provide
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a clear image of past events.
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Browsing
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 a great idea to find new information and make
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 with mutual objectives. Putting everything into a nutshell, learning about the history of your place not only builds a sense of confidence but
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 might have a big impact on our way of
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The essay addresses both parts of the task, discussing the reasons why people are interested in the history of their homes and how they can research it.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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