The gap between the rich and the poor is increasingly wide, as poor people become poorer and rich people become richer. What problems could this situations cause? what are the solutions to address those problems?

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between poor
people
and rich
people
is growing
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either they become poorer or wealthier. In my perspective,
this
leads to problems
such
as increased dissatisfaction and crime in society,
as well as
abnormal
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behavior
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that is
caused by
illiteracy
.
Therefore
the
government
can establish a balance to some extent by regulating taxation and providing free educational
opportunities
On the one hand, the growing
gap
between different classes can lead to an increase in criminal
behavior
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and dissatisfaction among the
people
.
This
is because it can create a sense of inequality and injustice among those who are less fortunate.
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This
economic inequality can lead to social unrest and resentment, which in turn can contribute to increased criminality. One example can be seen in the United States, where the
wealth
gap
has been increasing for decades. The growing divide between the wealthy and the poor has led to higher crime rates in low-income areas, as
people
turn to illicit activities to survive.
Nevertheless
, the
government
can alleviate these challenges by setting progressive taxation, which involves higher taxes on the wealthy.
Additionally
, the specific rates for these taxes can vary depending on the individual's income and assets. Perhaps the
government
can, to an extent, create a balance in society.
On the other hand
, the disparity in
wealth
and
opportunities
can lead to
lack
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social facilities for poor
people
. When
people
feel that their needs and aspirations are not being met, they may become disillusioned and frustrated, which can result in jobless and
illiteracy
lack of respect for the law and
in
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illegal
behavior
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behaviour
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.
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, the manner
due to
lack of
educations
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education
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.
Illiteracy
is enslaving them day after day.
As a result
, they can be poorer than past.
For example
, Brazil has a significant
gap
between the rich and the poor, with the wealthiest 1% owning more than 100 times the
wealth
of the bottom 50%.
This
disparity has led to widespread frustration and discontent among the Brazilian population, particularly among the lower and middle classes who struggle with high levels of poverty, unemployment, and limited
opportunities
for social advancement.
However
, the
government
by redistribution of
wealth
through social welfare programs,
policies
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and policies
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that promote equal access to education, healthcare, and job
opportunities
can help to address the root causes of economic inequality, reducing poverty and increasing social mobility. In conclusion,
while
the
gap
between the rich and the poor is increasing and leading to problems
such
as dissatisfaction
illiteracy
and crime, I believe that the
government
can address these issues to some extent through policies
such
as taxes and providing free social and educational services.
This
can help to reduce the
gap
in
wealth
and create more equal
opportunities
for all citizens.
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