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You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: Explain why you have moved Describe the new house Invite your friend to come and visit

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Dear Sarah Long time no see! How are you? Recently, I haven't had time to hang out with you because I have to move
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 to another city with my parents. Now everything have done , so I really want to share with you about my new
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. The reason my family decided to replace the
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 is that my parent resigned their position in the old company and applied to another company to improve the work environment and their salary.
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, we believe that
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 is the right step for new experiences, explore diffirent culture and ways of life. My new two-story townhouse is not very big , but it is cosy and has many modern devices in
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 quiet residential area. The
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 has a living room, a kitchen, two bathrooms, and two bedrooms.
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, the main thing that makes me love
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 is the large garden with many flowers and trees. It brings a fresh atmosphere and a peaceful vibe. I really hope
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 place will give our family members a retreat after work and study. Sarah, I have decorated my room with some items we bought in the supermarket
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 month. Could you come to my home at weekend, we will have a small party , and I will show you many interesting things in my home. I look forward to your response Thoai My

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task, but some ideas need to be more clear and more full.
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Task response: Say why you moved in a more direct way at the start. This will make your main point easy to see.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, but some sentences are too long and hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use full stops more often. Do not join two ideas with only a comma.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph. This will make the letter easier to read.
task response
Task response: You cover all three points in the question.
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Task response: The new house is described with clear details, like the rooms and the garden.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The order of ideas is good: reason, house, then invite.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing fit a friendly letter.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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