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Band 4.5

You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: Explain why you have moved Describe the new house Invite your friend to come and visit

Dear Ms Ngoc,
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 hope you are doing well. I am fine.
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 am writing to share about a different apartment.
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 weekend, I moved to Da Nang city, because it is convenient for my new job. I'm quite unhappy when I must move to a new city. My new house has 2 bedrooms, 1 kitchen,1 toilet and has full facilities , and especially has a wonderful balcony.
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 like it very much,because it is peaceful,
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 can serve as an efficient way to release stress after a long time.
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 promise you very much,
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 I would like to invite you to come to my new house at
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the weekend
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. Can you visit
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my house? Please reply to me. wish best wishes van anh

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grammar
Fix capital I and start each sentence with a cap. Use full stops and spaces after commas.
format
Close the letter with a simple line like Best wishes, Van Anh.
structure
Break the writing into two or three small parts: move, house, and invite.
coherence
Use connecting words to link ideas, such as and, because, also.
tense
Keep tense n line: moved, like, would like.
style
Check space after a comma and small mistakes in numbers.
content
Clear goal: tell a friend about the move and invite them.
content
Gives facts about the house (beds, kitchen, balcony).
tone
Warm tone overall.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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