In the future, all cars,buses and trucks will be driver less.The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In
this
modern era,
while
artificial
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is taking over the world and technology is more advanced than ever before, the trend of being
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is more popular.
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essay will discuss both perspectives in support of
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latter. On the one hand, vehicle automation would help
passengers
reduce unnecessary social contact.
Human
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just went through one of the most dangerous diseases
from
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20th
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century - Covid 19 pandemic which
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awareness about the importance of social distancing, and
thus
,
driveless
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vehicles would be considered
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an outstanding solution.
For example
, in China, after Covid 19 pandemic, the number of automated
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was
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increased by three times compared to
this
figure before the period, thanks to the subsidies from the Chinese government.
On the other hand
, there is no doubt that ensuring safety for
passengers
is still a challenge for
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companies developing
driveless
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transport. Even though, automation in
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has been used in
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since the end of
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century, it was only introduced in public as a kind of transport when
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Model Y was released in 2005 by Elon Musk.
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, there are numerous
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non-estimated situations
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happend
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happened
happen
for
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passengers
.
For instance
,
according to
the statistic of China Morning Post,
in
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last
year, there
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over
hundred
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accidents
due to
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uncontrolable
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uncontrollable
vehicles from various
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brands
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such
as MG, Hanal or Tesla.
To sum up
, it is inevitable that the hazard
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by autopilot would be a concern for
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.
However
, the application of autopilot usage growing in size will reduce social contact for citizens which help to minimize the risk of
widespreading
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widespread
other disease
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like
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corona virus
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.
Therefore
, in my perspective, the advantages of trends as
such
overweight the disadvantages if the company can minimize the risk of
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autopilot to
passengers
.
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