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To what extent do you think the faithful execution of preventative measures could limit corruption?

The faithful application of preventive measures consists
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 a good knowledge of the laws. What is allowed to be done
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 the law? What is forbidden to do, because it violates the law? Yes, prevention is the key to preventing the breaking of the law, which is ultimately defined as corruption. The more preventive measures are implemented, the less corruption results.

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