The maps below show the village of stokeford in 1930 and in 2010

The maps below show the village of stokeford in 1930 and in 2010
The map illustrates changes that happened in Stokeford between 1950,
2010
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and 2010
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Overall
there were major changes, it
become
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became
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more
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a more
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modernized area, In 1930 there were
bridge
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bridges
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in
eastern
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the eastern
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of the map,
then
in 2010 it didn't
changed
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change
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, but the time there were
road
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roads
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leads
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leading
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to
south
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the south
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,
however
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however,
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it was removed In 2010, and there
were
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was
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farmland
in contrast
, in 2010 it was
demolited
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demolished
and
houses
built
,
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before there was primary school later 2 extra blocks built there, Regarding to garden in the East,
instead
of it was large
house
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houses
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,
however
coming to 2010 large
houses
turned into retirement
home
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homes
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, a shop
that
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apply
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located in
west
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the west
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was removed
2010
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in 2010
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, and again built
houses
,
during
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In
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the 1930
in
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apply
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western south there
were
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was
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huge farmland,
however
in 2010 it wiped out and once again
houses
built there
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demolition
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • urbanization
  • land use
  • farmlands
  • notable buildings
  • layout
  • developments
  • economic growth
  • population growth
  • amenities
  • transformation
  • expansion
  • reconstruction
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