The maps below show the village of stokeford in 1930 and in 2010
The map illustrates changes that happened in Stokeford between 1950,
2010
Correct word choice
and 2010
Overall
there were major changes, it become
Wrong verb form
became
more
modernized area,
In 1930 there were Correct article usage
a more
bridge
in Fix the agreement mistake
bridges
eastern
of the map, Correct article usage
the eastern
then
in 2010 it didn't changed
, but the time there were Change the verb form
change
road
Fix the agreement mistake
roads
leads
to Wrong verb form
leading
south
, Correct article usage
the south
however
it was removed In 2010, and there Add the comma(s)
however,
were
farmland Change the verb form
was
in contrast
, in 2010 it was demolited
and Correct your spelling
demolished
houses
built,
before there was primary school later 2 extra blocks built there,
Regarding to garden in the East, Remove the comma
apply
instead
of it was large house
, Fix the agreement mistake
houses
however
coming to 2010 large houses
turned into retirement home
, a shop Fix the agreement mistake
homes
that
located in Correct pronoun usage
apply
west
was removed Add an article
the west
2010
, and again built Change preposition
in 2010
houses
, during
the 1930 Change preposition
In
in
western south there Change preposition
apply
were
huge farmland, Correct subject-verb agreement
was
however
in 2010 it wiped out and once again houses
built thereSubmitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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