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The charts below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows that salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows that salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.
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give
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an information
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information
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 about
destination
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the destination
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 of
graduated
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graduating
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 anthropology after finishing
degree
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a degree
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 course from
university
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the university
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along with
 tables charts illustrating the
percentage
 of salaries after 5 years
work
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of work
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 categorized by type of employment.
Overall
, it can be seen that most
of
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graduated
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the graduated
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anthropology
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in anthropology
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choosed
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chose
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 full-time
work
,
while
 part-time
work
 with
post graduated
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post-graduated
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study
 was the least popular.
Goverment
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Government
 sector had the highest
paying
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pay
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 rate among other types after 5
year's
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year of
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work
.
According to
pie
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the pie
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 chart,
Full time
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work
 dominated others with 52%, followed by
part time
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work
 with 15% and unemployed with 12%, respectively. Full-time
postgraduated
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postgraduate
study
 and part-time
work
 with
postgraduated
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postgraduate
study
 are the least
interested
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interesting
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, accounting for 8% and 5%, respectively. Looking at the table chart, private companies offered a lower
paid
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pay
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 at 25,000-49,999 dollars with 10%, which was the largest share,
while
 had only 30% for
higer
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higher
payment
 at over 100,000
dollar
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.
In contrast
,
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the Goverment
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Goverment
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government
 sector showed
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a relative
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relative
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relatively
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 high
in
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apply
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percentage
 with 50% in
payment
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payments
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 at over 100,000
dollar
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dollars
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. Meanwhile, Freelance consultants had the highest
percentage
 in 75,000-99,999 dollars
payment
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payments
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 with 40%. In summary,
full-time
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a full-time
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 job was the most popular for graduated anthropology.
However
, part-time
work
 with
postgraduated
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postgraduate
study
 was
choosed
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chosen
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 by the smallest number.
Government
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The government
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 sector had the highest
percentage
 of
high
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high-paying
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payment
job
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jobs
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. In
comparsion
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comparison
, private companies provided lower
paying
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pay
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rate
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rates
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 for employment.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, work, study, payment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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