The charts below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows that salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows that salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.
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give
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an information
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information
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about
destination
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the destination
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of
graduated
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anthropology after finishing
degree
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a degree
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course from
university
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the university
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along with
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tables charts illustrating the
percentage
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of salaries after 5 years
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work
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of work
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categorized by type of employment.
Overall
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, it can be seen that most
of
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graduated
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the graduated
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anthropology
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in anthropology
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choosed
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chose
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full-time
work
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,
while
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part-time
work
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with
post graduated
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post-graduated
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study
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was the least popular.
Goverment
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sector had the highest
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rate among other types after 5
year's
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year of
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work
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.
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pie
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chart,
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work
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dominated others with 52%, followed by
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work
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with 15% and unemployed with 12%, respectively. Full-time
postgraduated
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postgraduate
study
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and part-time
work
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with
postgraduated
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postgraduate
study
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are the least
interested
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interesting
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, accounting for 8% and 5%, respectively. Looking at the table chart, private companies offered a lower
paid
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at 25,000-49,999 dollars with 10%, which was the largest share,
while
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had only 30% for
higer
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higher
payment
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at over 100,000
dollar
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dollars
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.
In contrast
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,
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the Goverment
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Goverment
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government
sector showed
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a relative
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relative
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relatively
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high
in
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apply
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percentage
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with 50% in
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payment
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payments
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at over 100,000
dollar
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. Meanwhile, Freelance consultants had the highest
percentage
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in 75,000-99,999 dollars
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payment
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payments
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with 40%. In summary,
full-time
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a full-time
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job was the most popular for graduated anthropology.
However
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, part-time
work
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with
postgraduated
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postgraduate
study
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was
choosed
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chosen
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by the smallest number.
Government
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The government
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sector had the highest
percentage
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of
high
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high-paying
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payment
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job
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jobs
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. In
comparsion
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comparison
, private companies provided lower
paying
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pay
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rate
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rates
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for employment.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, work, study, payment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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