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Some people think that it is a waste of time for high school students to study literature, such as novels and peoms. To what extend do you agree and disagree?

#people #waste #time #school #students #study #literature #novels #peoms
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There's no denying the fact that
literature
 is important at some point.
While
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 a commonly held
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 that students are wasting their
time
 when taking
literature
 courses, there is
also
 an argument that
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opposes
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 it. In my opinion,
although
 studying
literature
 might improve one's English language, I believe that
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 a waste of
time
 too, as there are more important
subject
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 that students could take in the
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time
. And
this
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discussing
 both views. On the one hand,
subjects
 like
science
 and maths
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 more helpful
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 in terms of finding a job.
Instead
 of schools giving students
literature
 courses, they should give them advanced classes like AP math or
science
 that will support them and guarantee a bright future.
For instance
, many
opeople
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people
 view people who major in arts
subjects
 as less intelligent than those who major in
science
subjects
.
On the other hand
,
literature
 can be helpful in many ways, they improve a
persons
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 grammar skills, vocabulary, and fluency. Because they write a lot and read a lot they are more skilled than those who study
science
 and other related
subjects
.
For instance
, many famous poets and novelists spend most
their
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times
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time
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 studying
literature
 which is why they are great at what they do. In conclusion, though many think
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 a
waist
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waste
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 of
time
, studying
literature
 has its advantages too. I personally think that the disadvantages tho
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 the advantages.
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task response
Work on ensuring that your essay thoroughly addresses all parts of the task. While you did discuss both views, more detail and specific examples are needed to fully develop your argument and show a comprehensive understanding.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion need to be clearer and more concise. Make sure to clearly state your thesis in the introduction and summarize your main points effectively in the conclusion.
task response
Support your main points with more specific and relevant examples. This will strengthen your argument and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your paragraphs more logically. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea and be clearly connected to the overall argument of your essay.
task response
You have a clear opinion and attempt to discuss both sides of the argument, which shows an understanding of the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
Your essay demonstrates some understanding of the topic and includes an attempt to explain both views, which is a positive step towards a balanced argument.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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