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Formal examinations are the only effective way to assess a student's performance. Continual assessment such as coursework and projects is not a satisfactory way to do this. Do you agree or disagree

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There is a growing debate over whether formal assessment is the sole means to evaluate student’s work. Some argue that coursework and projects don’t suit continual assessment, whilst others find formal testing is an alluring method.
Thus
, I firmly disagree that thinking outside of the box,
as well as
 practical application of knowledge would be adversely for students taking coursework and projects.
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introduction conclusion present
Your introduction is relatively clear, but it can be further developed. One way to improve it is to explicitly state your position and outline the main points that will be discussed in the essay. For example: 'While formal examinations have their merits, continual assessment through coursework and projects provides a more comprehensive evaluation of a student's abilities. This essay will discuss the benefits of both methods.'
supported main points
Ensure that your ideas are fully developed and supported with relevant examples and explanations. For instance, you could compare the effectiveness of formal exams versus coursework in assessing skills like critical thinking and creativity.
complete response
Clarify your position and maintain it consistently throughout the essay. Currently, the introduction is somewhat vague about your stance. Clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the statement and ensure that your body paragraphs align with this position.
task achievement
Your essay touches on an important debate in the field of education and attempts to address both sides of the argument.
clear comprehensive ideas
You have used some sophisticated vocabulary and expressions, which is a positive aspect of your writing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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