The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
The pie charts give information about the
water
used for residential, industrial and agricultural purposes in
San
Diego
County,
California
,
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and the world as a whole. It is noticeable that more
water
is consumed by homes than by industry or agriculture in the two American regions.
By contrast
, agriculture accounts for the vast majority of
water
used worldwide. In
San
Diego
County and
California
State, residential
water
consumption accounts for 60% and 39% of total
water
usage.
By contrast
, a mere 8% of the
water
used globally goes to homes. The opposite trend can be seen when we look at
water
consumption for agriculture.
This
accounts for a massive 69% of global
water
use, but only 17% and 28% of
water
usage in
San
Diego
and
California
respectively.
Such
dramatic differences are not seen when we compare the figures for industrial
water
use. The same proportion of
water
(23%) is used by industry in
San
Diego
and worldwide,
while
the figure for
California
is 10% higher, at 33%
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  • proportion
  • households
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  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
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  • practices
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