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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
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The pie charts give information about the
water
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 used for residential, industrial and agricultural purposes in
San
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Diego
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 County,
California
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 and the world as a whole. It is noticeable that more
water
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 is consumed by homes than by industry or agriculture in the two American regions.
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, agriculture accounts for the vast majority of
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 used worldwide. In
San
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Diego
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 County and
California
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 State, residential
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 consumption accounts for 60% and 39% of total
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 usage.
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, a mere 8% of the
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 used globally goes to homes. The opposite trend can be seen when we look at
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 consumption for agriculture.
This
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 accounts for a massive 69% of global
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 use, but only 17% and 28% of
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 usage in
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Diego
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 and
California
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 respectively.
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 dramatic differences are not seen when we compare the figures for industrial
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 use. The same proportion of
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 (23%) is used by industry in
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Diego
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 and worldwide,
while
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 the figure for
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 is 10% higher, at 33%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, san, diego, california with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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