The graph shows average annual percentages of online adults who use different social networks. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph shows average annual percentages of online adults who use different social networks.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart represents the yearly percentile of people using various online social
sites
in 2014 and 2015.
Overall
,
one
site was the most commonly used site by the
users
in both years,
whereas
, five
sites
was
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the least
common
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used website.
Also
,
provided
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the provided
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data shows that no
sites
and two
sites
were equally popular in
the
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both given years. Generally, the outlay of websites being used in 2015 was higher than that of 2014.
One
site was
widely
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a widely
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used website by
the
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apply
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users
in 2014 and
in
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2015
by
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with
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the percentage of 36 and 28 respectively.
Similarly
, two
sites
and no
sites
depicts
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almost stable percentiles with a mere difference of 1% in the given time period.
On the other hand
, 12%
online
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of online
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users
used three
sites
in
first
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year and
this
number slightly increased to 16% a year later. Both four
sites
and five
sites
were the least popular among
users
by
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with
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the
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apply
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percentage
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of 5% and 8% for the former
one
and 2% and 4% for the
later
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latter
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one
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average annual percentage
  • online adults
  • social networks
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • highest/lowest
  • discernible trends
  • consistent growth/decline
  • popularity
  • competition
  • functionality
  • significant changes
  • patterns
  • spike/drop in usage
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