The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
The illustration depicts the processes by which
sugar
cane
turned into sugar
.
Overall
, the process
begins with planting sugar
cane
and ends with drying and cooling so they can become sugar
. This
is achieved by crushing the sugar
cane
, resulting in sugar
juice
and then
further
machine processing that can result in sugar
.
The process
starts with sugar
cane
cultivation which takes between 12 and 18 months. After being harvested with either handpicked or using tractors, sugar
canes are then
crushed by using a machine. The crushing process
resulted in a liquid form of juice
.
In step 4, the juice
is then
purified using a limestone filter and followed up by placing the purified juice
into an evaporator so the juice
can be turned into syrup using high temperature. The syrup is then
undergoing a centrifuge process
where sugar
crystals separate from the syrup, and the processed material is then
dried and cooled, resulting in sugar
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