The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
The illustration depicts the processes by which
sugar
cane
turned into
sugar
.
Overall
, the
process
begins with planting
sugar
cane
and ends with drying and cooling so they can become
sugar
.
This
is achieved by crushing the
sugar
cane
, resulting in
sugar
juice
and
then
further
machine processing that can result in
sugar
. The
process
starts with
sugar
cane
cultivation which takes between 12 and 18 months. After being harvested with either handpicked or using tractors,
sugar
canes are
then
crushed by using a machine. The crushing
process
resulted in a liquid form of
juice
. In step 4, the
juice
is
then
purified using a limestone filter and followed up by placing the purified
juice
into an evaporator so the
juice
can be turned into syrup using high temperature. The syrup is
then
undergoing a centrifuge
process
where
sugar
crystals separate from the syrup, and the processed material is
then
dried and cooled, resulting in
sugar
.
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