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The tables below show people’s reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below show people’s reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables illustrate the top reasons why
smokers
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 want to quit
this
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 habit.
Moreover
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, the date outlines the timelines they want to give up. It can be seen that the main factor that makes
smokers
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 abandon cigarettes is good for health conditions, which has a total of 71%,
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 the percentage of current health problems is the lowest among the five reasons, at 12%.
Furthermore
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, the figures for the time when
smokers
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 give up, most light
smokers
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 tend to quit and quit early.
However
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, most heavy
smokers
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 do not want to break
this
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 habit. Looking at the details, the proportion of health improvement is the most significant of all reasons.
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, the second ranker reason is financial factors which discourage a total of 31%
ofrespondents
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of respondents
 from smoking. A quarter of people choose less risk of getting smoking-related illness to be the third reason, which is higher than existing disease and pressure from their family, at 25%, 16% and 12% respectively. Turning to the timeframes when
smokers
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 plan to quit, it is
also
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 clear that most people who prepare to give up as soon as
possibile
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possible
, especially the group
smokers
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 fewer than 10 cigarettes a day. The percentage of light
smokers
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 who quit within the next month and six months, at 21% and 46% respectively, are higher than the percentage of heavy
smokers
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 and moderate
smokers
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.
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, the proportion of heavy
smokers
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 who do not intend to give up smoke is the highest among the three groups.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words smokers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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