The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the mean number of
films
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casted
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cast
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in a film hall each year,
according to
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3 age groups.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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movies for both mid-
adults
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(25-44) and mature
adults
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(45-65) declined heavily
whereas
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,
films
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for young
adults
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(18-24) grew rapidly. In the year 2000, 15 movies were released for people
belonging
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aged
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45-65, which was the most popular.
On the other hand
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, in the same
year
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year,
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films
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for young
adults
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was
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were
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the least, recording
as
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apply
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10.
Also
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, there were 12
films
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for mid-
adults
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. In the next 5 years,
films
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for above 25 years followed a downtrend but
films
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for young
adults
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followed an uptrend and it surpassed the 25-44 age group. Thereby, movies for both mid and mature
adults
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drastically minimized and reached a value of below 8 and 5, respectively in 2015.
However
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,
films
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for young
adults
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remained at 12.
Similarly
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, amount of shows
casted
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cast
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more mature
adults
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were
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was
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12. And by 2015, shows for young
adults
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inclined to 14.
Submitted by Witharana Senesh Rasinda Wickramasinghe on

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words films, adults with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • age group
  • average number
  • theater
  • per year
  • trends
  • noticeable
  • fluctuations
  • significant differences
  • similarities
  • patterns
  • younger
  • older
  • respectively
  • period
  • shown in the graph
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