The graph shows average annual percentages of online adults who use different social networks. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph shows average annual percentages of online adults who use different social networks.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The provided graph compares adults' yearly usage of 5 different mobile applications from 2012 to 2015.
Overall
, all of the social media platforms had
upward
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trend, except for
LinkedIn
. Facebook was the most used application among the others. In 2012, Facebook started with 67% of
users
,
this
number grew slightly to 72% by the end of the period. Twitter began with 16% of
users
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and rose gradually to almost a quarter. Pinterest was the second least used in 2012 with just 15%,
however
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the percentage doubled to just above 30%.
Similarly
, Instagram
users
went up significantly, starting with only 13% in 2012, and ending with 28%.
In contrast
with other social media applications,
LinkedIn
was the only platform which fluctuated during the period. There were 20% of adults who had
LinkedIn
in 2012. The
users
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LinkedIn
increased and reached its peak in 2014
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around 30%.
At the end
of the
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this
number reduces to only a quarter.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average annual percentage
  • online adults
  • social networks
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • highest/lowest
  • discernible trends
  • consistent growth/decline
  • popularity
  • competition
  • functionality
  • significant changes
  • patterns
  • spike/drop in usage
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