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The graph shows average annual percentages of online adults who use different social networks. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows average annual percentages of online adults who use different social networks. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided graph compares adults' yearly usage of 5 different mobile applications from 2012 to 2015.
Overall
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, all of the social media platforms had
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 trend, except for
LinkedIn
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. Facebook was the most used application among the others. In 2012, Facebook started with 67% of
users
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,
this
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 number grew slightly to 72% by the end of the period. Twitter began with 16% of
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 and rose gradually to almost a quarter. Pinterest was the second least used in 2012 with just 15%,
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however
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 the percentage doubled to just above 30%.
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, Instagram
users
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 went up significantly, starting with only 13% in 2012, and ending with 28%.
In contrast
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 with other social media applications,
LinkedIn
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 was the only platform which fluctuated during the period. There were 20% of adults who had
LinkedIn
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 in 2012. The
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users
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LinkedIn
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 increased and reached its peak in 2014
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 around 30%.
At the end
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 of the
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period,
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this
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 number reduces to only a quarter.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words linkedin, users with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average annual percentage
  • online adults
  • social networks
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • highest/lowest
  • discernible trends
  • consistent growth/decline
  • popularity
  • competition
  • functionality
  • significant changes
  • patterns
  • spike/drop in usage
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