The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.

The chart below shows the changes in the percentage of households with cars in one European country between 1971 and 2001.
The given chart illustrates the differences in
proportion
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the proportion
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of
ownerships
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ownership
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with
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cars in
one
of the countries in Europe between 1971 and 2001. Generally speaking, the use of
transports
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was rising over decades, and several trends were found in figures among those owning
one
or two cars,
however
by the end of the period they both approached the same level. To commence, in 1971 individuals with no cars made up about half of the population,
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in close proximity to 50%.
Nonetheless
, passing through
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this
percentage declined to 30%, which means the amount of drivers has expanded.
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the statistics of
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, the amount of
one
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car
drivers was slowly falling,
however
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in 2001 it experienced a significant increase, resulting
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45%. In comparison, two
car
owners raised and dropped in turn during years, being less than
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car
owners
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, except in 1991.
However
, in 2001 its percentage reached
at
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31%, making a tiny porch with
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car
owners
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words one, car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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