Some people think that one of the ways to solve environmental problems is to increase price of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Some people
argued
about Wrong verb form
argue
increase
Replace the word
increasing
price
of fuel for Correct article usage
the price
automobile
and other vehicles in order to decrease environmental issues. Fix the agreement mistake
automobiles
This
essay totally agrees with that statement because this
increasing
would reduce demand among residents and increase their usage Replace the word
increase
to
public Change preposition
of
transportations
.
On the one hand, there is a strong correlation between Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
rise
Add an article
the rise
of
the value and Change preposition
in
decline
in the Correct article usage
the decline
using
, Replace the word
use
this
is because it would affect in a direct way on
the people who can afford it and make them use Change preposition
apply
Add an article
a bicycle
the bicycle
bicycle
or Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
walking
Wrong verb form
walk
instead
of these cars. For example
, it has been shown that most people who life
in China Replace the word
live
they
restrict their Correct pronoun usage
apply
using
Wrong verb form
use
for
fuel because Change preposition
of
it
expensive for most nations.
Add a verb
it is
it was
On the other hand
, the implementation of that rising
would make most Replace the word
rise
inhabitant
use public transportation as Change to a plural noun
inhabitants
subway
and Correct article usage
the subway
taxy
which contribute to Correct your spelling
taxis
decrease
the effects of Wrong verb form
decreasing
that
gasoline. Establishing Correct determiner usage
apply
of
various types of public Change preposition
apply
transports
in countries Fix the agreement mistake
transport
are
essential because they would not Correct subject-verb agreement
is
quiet
using that if there Correct your spelling
quit
is
no Wrong verb form
were
substitute
. Fix the agreement mistake
substitutes
For instance
, a recent study showed that developed countries provided a lot that
transportation which in a direct relationship led to Change preposition
of
decline
in the number of individuals who use their own cars.
In conclusion, I completely agree with that, because in my opinion I prefer to start with straightforward steps Add an article
a decline
the decline
such
as raise in
the price and Wrong verb form
raising
provide to
them Wrong verb form
providing
different
types of substitutions Change preposition
with different
as a result
that would decrease in
Change preposition
apply
the
usage and increase their awareness about Correct article usage
apply
risks
of that gasoline of plants and animals.Correct article usage
the risks
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