Some people believe that the increasing use of technology in education significantly enhances the learning experience. Others think that it leads to greater distraction and hinders the learning process. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

One of the most controversial topics today relates to whether the introduction of
technology
in education supports
learners
or not. In
this
essay, I elaborate on both views and describe the reasons why I am inclined to think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. On one side of the argument, there are some individuals who claim that using
technology
leads to better academic outcomes. The primary reason is that the recent
technology
offers more learning opportunities.
For instance
,
although
studying abroad was the only practical method to master a foreign language before the advent of the internet, language
learners
today can acquire it from home owing to the
internet
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.
Additionally
, the internet allows them to find what they want to know quickly. When they face
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matters, they can immediately discover their solutions online.
On the other hand
, others argue that using
technology
is a major deterrent
while
learning.
That is
because
learners
try to use it without thinking or trying to solve problems by themselves. 
Therefore
, the ability
of thinking
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logically will not be cultivated, and even if they face
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a similar situation, they will hardly solve it by themselves. Another justification is that computer users can
various
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things at once with a computer.
Thus
,
while
studying, other applications are often turned on,
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will cause them to lose their concentration, retarding their learning process. In conclusion, I think that both views are rational. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that
technology
brings positive impacts on education because it expands learning
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and accelerates to find answers.
In addition
, I vehemently support the use of artificial intelligence because it will provide
learners
with
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learning experience.
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Consider adding more varied examples to substantiate your points, such as benefits of technology in collaborative learning or personalized education.
coherence cohesion
Work on the precision of language and ensure smooth transitions between ideas. This can enhance the logical flow and readability of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, well-structured body paragraphs, and a concise conclusion. Each section effectively addresses a specific part of the task.
task achievement
You've done well to present both viewpoints on the topic and provided your own opinion clearly and comprehensively. This shows a good grasp of the task demands.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • access to information
  • interactive learning
  • collaborative learning
  • personalized learning
  • self-directed learning
  • geographical barriers
  • adaptive learning technologies
  • digital tools and multimedia
  • social media
  • face-to-face communication skills
  • social development
  • dependence on technology
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • educational divide
  • equal access
  • technological resources
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