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The charts below show the information about a US bus company between 1999 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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 pie chart gives information regarding USA bus company between 1999 and 2003 within 2 categories. These are ‘Actual and Target’.
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, when we look at the panel Actual and Target had 80% in 1999. After that Actual had 30% in 2000. Actual and Target’s ratio decreased.
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 the same in 2001 and 2002.
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, Actual had 70% in 2003 and Target had 30% in 2003.
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, Target is still low. Taking everything into account the highest were in 2003 and 2002. Later on, the lowest was in 1999. In 2003 the highest rate was 20%. All in all, the diagram which is above mentioned describes the performance of the bus arriving on time. From my point of in 2000, 2001 and 2002 the rates did not decrease.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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