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the tables shows sales of fairtade-lable coffee and bananas,sumerize

the tables shows sales of fairtade-lable coffee and bananas,sumerize
The tables illustrate the
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in five European countries (UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden) for the years 1999 and 2004, measured in millions of
euros
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.
Overall
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, the
sales
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 of coffee increased across all five countries,
while
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 the
sales
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 of bananas rose significantly in three countries, but dropped in two. In terms of coffee, the UK saw the most dramatic increase, with
sales
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 rising from 1.5
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to 20
million
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 in 2004. Switzerland
also
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 experienced growth, albeit more modest, with
sales
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 increasing from 3
million
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euros
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 to 6
million
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.
In contrast
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, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden saw smaller increases, with their
sales
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 remaining below 2
million
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euros
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 by 2004. For bananas, Switzerland consistently had the highest
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, which surged from 15
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to 47
million
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 in 2004, a significant rise of 32
million
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euros
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. The UK
also
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 saw substantial growth, with
sales
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 increasing from 1
million
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 to 5.5
million
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.
Similarly
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, Belgium experienced an increase from 0.6
million
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 to 4
million
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euros
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.
However
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,
sales
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 in Sweden and Denmark declined, with Sweden’s figures dropping from 1.8
million
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 to 1
million
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, and Denmark’s falling from 2
million
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 to 0.9
million
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, euros, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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