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the first chart below shows how energy is used in average austrain houshold. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emmision which result from this energy use. summerize

the first chart below shows how energy is used in average austrain houshold. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emmision which result from this energy use. summerize
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The tables below provide information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 in two
years
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, 1999 and 2004, in five European countries.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
Switzerland
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 had the highest amount of
bananas
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sale
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sold
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 in both
years
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. It
also
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 profited the most from selling
coffee
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 in 1999;
however
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,
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UK
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the UK
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 managed to leave
Switzerland
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 behind in 2004. Regarding
coffee
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, the first table shows that
Switzerland
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 possessed the highest figure of three million euros (me),
while
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 Denmark and
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UK
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the UK
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 ranked second and third with 1.8 and 15 me, respectively. Belgium and Sweden gained the least amount of money selling
coffee
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, with 1 and 0.8 me in turn. Surprisingly,
selling
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the selling
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 patterns of
this
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 good have changed in the next 5
years
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.
This
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 business has become lucrative in
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UK
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the UK
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 and its total earnings soared to 20 me.
Although
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 the profit in
Switzerland
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 doubled in 2004, it wasn’t as booming as in
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UK
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the UK
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.
Moreover
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, Denmark and Sweden experienced a slight increase of 0.2 me over these
years
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.
Lastly
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, Belgium made 1.7 me out of
coffee
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. As
long
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far
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 as
bananas
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 sale is concerned,
Switzerland
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 has done a great job, being the top-selling country continuously, earning 15 and 47 me in each of the
years
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. Except for Sweden and Denmark, in which the sale rate of
bananas
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 dropped
for
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to
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 1.1 and 0.8
me
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apply
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, all other nations acquired a taste for
this
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 crop more than before.
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UK
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The UK
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 managed to sell almost 5 times more in 2004 compared to having 1 me, formerly.
Along with
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 Belgium, which experienced a 3.4 me raise, starting at 0.6 me.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, bananas, years, switzerland, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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