in many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. do you this this is a positive or negative development?
most
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In most
of
countries today, customers can go to Change preposition
apply
supermarket
and find Add an article
the supermarket
a supermarket
food
produces
all over the world. Wrong verb form
produced
For
my point of view, Change preposition
From
this
situation has more
positive impact than Correct article usage
a more
the
negative.
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a
To begin
with, it cheaper
and easier to customer get Add a missing verb
is cheaper
food
that they want to try or make. When supermarket
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supermarkets
provides
all over the world foods or ingredients Wrong verb form
are provided
consumer
only need to travel to the nearest Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
supermarket
, they do not need
deliver the Add the particle
need to
food
and wait for couple
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a couple
days
. Change preposition
of days
As a result
, they can consume and use the food
or ingredient as soon as possible and its
relatively cheaper than the travel fees. Correct your spelling
it's
Secondly
, its
way healthier and fresh than if the consumer Replace the word
it's
it is
deliver
it online. When Change the verb form
delivers
people
can but the food
at supermarket
they can directly looking the condition of the Add an article
the supermarket
food
and the food
is fresh becauseCorrect article usage
the
supermarket
keeps it in the refrigerator and also
correct temperature.
However
, this
situation can lead to reducing
the economy and Replace the word
a reduction in
also
local food
production. People
relatively
, Add a missing verb
are relatively
interest
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interested
to
other Change preposition
in
countries
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countries'
country's
food
especially because of the digital era, people
can see any type of foods
around the world and have Fix the agreement mistake
food
desire
to try it. When Correct article usage
a desire
people
consume and interested
in other countries more it will Add a missing verb
are interested
impract
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impact
to
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apply
the
local production. The local production will not have significant profit than before, Correct article usage
apply
resulted
in the Wrong verb form
resulting
bankrupty
of the company.
In summary, the ease of buying Correct your spelling
bankruptcy
food
at supermarket
have positive and negative Add an article
the supermarket
a supermarket
impact
, Fix the agreement mistake
impacts
while
i
believe Change the capitalization
I
this
situation has more benefit
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benefits
such
as convenience and lead
to Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
healthy
lifestyle.Add an article
a healthy
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