Many species of animals all around the world are on verge of extinction.Some say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out,while others say that we should concentrate more on the problems of human beings.But other argue that we should focus on the problems faced by human.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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that nations and

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human beings

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should have the responsibility to protect

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animals from distinction.The advocates

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that a large percentage of climate change

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by

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industrial activity and commercial

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in plenty of habitats

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destroyed,affecting the whole ecosystem. The opposite thinks that extinction

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caused by

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,but we should more focus on economic growth

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of protecting

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the environment

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for social welfare Generally speaking,different

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of industry

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emitted so much global warming gases into

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,resulting in the

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more and more heat over the decades.

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,there are more disasters,

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as

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glacier melting,extreme climate and

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hurricane

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. Those of the disaster will lead to a

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of animal's habitats,who will

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their shelters and food sources within a short period.Some

animal

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animals

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,like

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,are

ecomically

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important to the whole ecosystem,which has a unique role in regulating the food web and sustainability.

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responsible for pollination.There are no

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new

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and

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without the bees.But the problem is that bees

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low heat tolerance so

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a small rise in

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temperature

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kill a large percentage of

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,leading to

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horrible results both in

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and ecosystem.'If we want to make money stably,

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we should protect our

environment

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.

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few advocates said. Some

oppenent

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opponents

partially agree that protecting the

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is important,but creating more employment

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and increasing the living standard is more important.In lots of developing countries,their citizens

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have enough clean water and

adequent

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adequate

food supply.So,the leader of the nation should prefer economic growth to sustainability.The local companies use

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of natural gas,producing more and more global warming gases.The local

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government policy

is to create more

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and jobs so they

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the

environment

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as soon as

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possible

for raw

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and fossil

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.They more focus on

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the welfare

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of local

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of nature. From my point of view,

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do think our

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should take responsibility to

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preserve

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the

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because we get some joy and inspiration from the beautiful landscapes and

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nature.Our offspring and

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generation do have the

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to do it as we do now.Some

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said we

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belong to the

foodchain

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,distinction of some species will

eventully

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lead to other species

to

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go

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extinct.