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The plans below show a school library five years ago and the same library now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given maps illustrate how a school library has changed after
five
years
.
Overall
, the sizes of facilities are constant
while
 the location has a remarkable change over
five
years
, except for
bookshelves
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the bookshelves
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 at the top of the maps. In the past, on the north side of the bottom of the map, the three apartments were a classroom, a meeting room and a borrowing and returning desk, respectively. After
five
years
,
this
 location expanded from three to four apartments which vanished from the classroom and
replaced
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was replaced
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 by a recording studio, the borrowing and returning desk apartment became two particular rooms that are a borrowing and a returning. At the top middle of the map, the
book shelves
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bookshelves
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 are not replaced after
five
years
while
 the
book shelves
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bookshelves
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 on the opposite side are changed to desks for students’ laptops. At the
center
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centre
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 of the map, the studying tables with four blocks in the previous
years
 are restructured to private studying tables with six blocks. On the
right hand
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 side, the desks for computers at the top are changed to the desks for students’ laptops and the library office is replaced by a conference department when we go down.
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introduction conclusion
Consider adding a short conclusion to summarize the key changes and add a sense of closure to your essay.
logical structure
Some sentences are a bit complex and may be confusing. Try to simplify sentence structures to enhance clarity.
complete response
Discuss any small changes that might have been missed to ensure a thorough response. For example, mention if there are any changes in the layout or design apart from functional changes.
relevant specific examples
You have included relevant and specific examples of changes in the library, highlighted clearly with location references.
supported main points
Most main points are well-supported with details of the changes that occurred over the five years.

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