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In an ever-changing world, the concept of lifelong learning-continuing to acquire new knowledge and skills throughout one's life - has gained significant importance. How does engaging in lifelong learning benefit individuals and contribute to the overall well-being of society? Provide specific examples to support your arguments.

In the
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 changing world, lifelong learning, a concept of keeping up with the latest
skills
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 throughout
life
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 cycle, has been essential. There are many advantages from acquiring new knowledge
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 as stay relevant in
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 market and increase
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 productivity that contribute to the economic growth.
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, lifelong learning is beneficial for individuals who actively acquiring new
skills
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 as they can stay relevant in
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labor
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 market
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although
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 the challenges faced
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 as job displacement by
technology
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Individual
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Individuals
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 who can keep up with the relevant
skills
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 can still be demanded by
employer
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employers
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eventhough
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even though
 they compete with
freshgraduates
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fresh graduates
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, lifelong learner will be exempted from lay off
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 technological change and can avoid the unemployment phase.
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,
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the
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technological changes, a worker takes
a
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training to make a
career-shift
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career shift
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 from being a statistician to
become
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AI
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an AI
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 expert. Individuals like
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 will likely secure new jobs and stay in
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labor
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 market
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 there is a revolution in
technology
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, the benefits of lifelong learning will
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 only perceived by
merely
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 individuals
,
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 but
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society
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collectivelly
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collectively
. A nation
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 practically can keep up with the latest
technology
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 will likely have
a
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higher economic growth because the economy is efficiently worked with the help of
technology
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, the foreign capital will influx to the nation as investment and will create larger jobs creation with higher wages which propel the
prosperous
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 of its civil society. Singapore is the best country to depict
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 condition as the economy is
largerly
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largely
 knowledge-based
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 of
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labor intensive
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, it pushes higher productivity and increases the population's livelihood
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, lifelong learning is beneficial for
individual
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individuals
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as well as
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 for the nation. To maintain the relevant
skills
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, Government's aid is needed.

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grammar
While your essay presents a clear argument and relevant examples, work on refining your grammatical structures. Some sentences lack clarity due to minor errors like missing articles or incorrect forms. For example, 'Singapore is the best country to depict this condition' could be improved to 'Singapore serves as an excellent example of this condition.' This will enhance the reader's understanding and improve coherence.
development
Try to develop your main points with more depth and provide additional specific examples. You have good illustrations, such as the career-shift example, but adding detail can make your argument even stronger. Discuss how these career shifts positively impact both individuals and the economy over time.
structure
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow your argument.
examples
You have included specific examples, like the career shift from statistician to AI expert, which support your arguments effectively. These make your essay more convincing and relatable.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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