Some people say that art subjects such as music, drama, and creative writing ‎are an essential part of education, and every school should include them in its ‎‏المنهج‏. Do you agree or disagree with your statement? Give your opinion ‎and examples from your own experience.‎

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task achievement
Make sure to answer all parts of the question. You should explain why you agree with the statement and provide specific, relevant examples.
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Expand on your points to fully develop your argument. Each reason should have supporting details and examples to paint a clearer picture for the reader.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating a clear and logical structure. An introduction should outline your main arguments, and a conclusion should summarize your essay and restate your main points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
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Develop more detailed examples to support your arguments. For example, explain how studying music has benefited you and how it could benefit other students.
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You have provided a personal example (studying music and now playing piano), which adds a personal touch to your essay.
coherence cohesion
You have made a clear statement about your position right at the beginning, making it easy for the reader to understand your perspective.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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