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The pie charts below show the different reasons for flight delays in a particular Asian country in 2015 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the different reasons for flight delays in a particular Asian country in 2015 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate information about the five causes of flight delays in a specific country in Asia in 2015 and 2016. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the airline
operation
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 control had
significant
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 effect in delaying planes take off in both years. In stark contrast, securing
operation
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 and military factors had tiny segments among other reasons in 2015 and 2016, respectively.
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 with 2015, in terms of the most remarkable proportion,
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airline
operation
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 management accounted for 40%
possessed
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 the biggest portion of all reasons for delaying, followed by air traffic management at 25%.
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airport security did not have a noticeable effect
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this
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 regular occurrence. In comparison with 2016, still airline
operation
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 control had a significant part of the flight delay
rose
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 from 40% to 46% in 2016. In terms of the noticeable and
unsignificant
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insignificant
 change, air traffic control dramatically plummeted 13% from 2015 to 2016 and the harsh weather merely increased from 21% to 23% over these years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words operation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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