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The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

#requests #formations #tourist #office #kingdom #january #june #information #features #comparison
The pie chart illustrates the information
of
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requests
 received by
tourist
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the tourist
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 department, from the month of January to
June
, in the United Kingdom. It
also
 shows three modes of
contacts
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contact
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 through which
requests
was
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were
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 received, that are in person, by telephone and by
emails
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email
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. As
for
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far
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 as the letter or
email
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emails
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 is concerned,
near to
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nearly
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 800
requests
 were received in
january
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January
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 but after March dramatic decline in the emails and letters to
tourist
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the tourist
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 office was noticed and remained constant from May to
june
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June
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 ( near to 400).
Moreover
, contact in person was less
then
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 600 in January but with passing time sharp climb was seen from
Feburary
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February
 to May which
wasabout
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was about
 400 in
Feburary
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February
 but reached
to
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1600 in May.
However
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this
 mode was at
it
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 peak in
June
 as
requests
 to tourist block
surpass
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the number of 1800.
Furthermore
, More
then
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 800
requests
was
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were
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 recorded
through
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by
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 telephone and gradually with time it reached
to
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apply
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1600 in
June
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words requests, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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