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The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The given table shows information about changes
of
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in
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 populations in
Australia
 and
Malaysia
 in 1980 and 2002 years. Units are measured in
percentage
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percentages
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 and numbers. From an
overall
perspective
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 it is readily apparent that the total demographic indications
noticeable
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noticeably
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 rose in
Malaysia
,
whereas
 in
Australia
 there was substantial
growth
 among senior citizens. The birth rate in both countries declined,
while
 populations of men and women almost stayed
on
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same
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the same
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 levels.
To begin
 with, both countries witnessed
growth
for
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 total population, near 5
millions
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million
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 in
Australia
 and more than 10 million
for
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in
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Malaysia
. The
growth
 of men and women hadn’t changed substantially in both countries, there was just
mere
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a mere
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 0,3%
growth
 trend for males and
in contrast
0.3
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a 0.3
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% fall in
Malaysia
. The indices of birth rates indicated changes, so there
were
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 a tiny fraction of 0.1%
growth
 in
Australia
 and 0.3% decline in
Malaysia
. The residents over 65
noticeable
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noticeably
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 grew, by 2.8% in
Australia
 and 0.6% in
Malaysia
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, malaysia, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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