Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leasing to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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and improving a range of technological devices. On the one hand, the main things that have

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can be solved by governments and companies. On the one side, it is important that authorities have

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You have addressed both parts of the task by discussing the causes of biodiversity loss and suggesting solutions.

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Your essay contains an introduction and a conclusion, which helps to structure your argument.

vocabulary

You attempt to use a range of vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'ecosystem,' 'biodiversity,' 'technological devices', and 'harmful trash.'

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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leasing to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?

Fully explain your ideas

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