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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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compares
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 the
reasons
on
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apply
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why
people
 commute using cars and
bycicle
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bicycle
bicycles
. All in all, workers mainly choose to cycle to work because it reduces pollution and it encourages
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle. Meanwhile, most workers prefer to drive to their
office
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offices
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 for comfort.
Health-related
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The health-related
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concern
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concerns
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is
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are
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 one of the two
reasons
 why a big percentage of
people
 commute using
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a bycicle
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bycicle
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bicycle
bicycles
. There are 30%
individuals
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of individuals
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 who travel because it promotes fitness. The same exact number of
people
also
 choose cycling as a mode of travel as it produces less pollution.
Another
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Another reason
Other reasons
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reasons
,
such
 as zero parking issues, relatively low costs and faster
than
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apply
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driving account
less
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for less
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 than 20%. 40% of
people
 travel
with
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by
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cars
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car
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 as it provides comfort. Followed by the distance of their office with just above 21%.
Another
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Another reason
Other reasons
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reasons
,
such
 as having stuff to carry and saving more time than cycling share the same amount of percentage, which is 14%.
Lastly
, around 10% claim that driving gives more safety than cycling.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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