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Some people think eating meat is bad for health. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, we live in an era of dramatic environmental changes. For that reason, today’s society has undergone significant changes and multiple new movements somehow have resulted from
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. One of them, a controversial topic, is vegetarianism. A lot of people, today, call for refusing to stop eating
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, considering
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 as an integral part of a healthy
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. Meanwhile,
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others
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 believe that the trend
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 effects on our health. In
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, people have been eating meat since prehistoric times.
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, it has
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taken a significant share in
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 diet, which is the strong point,
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safety.
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, many doctors recommend consuming more protein
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 of carbohydrates
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 as sugar to prevent obesity and different
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cardiovascular
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 diseases. They argue that the essential
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amino acids
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 can be easier absorbed from meat-based food than the other sources; without referring to valuable nutrients
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 as iron,
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 B12 and A etc., which are in abundance in
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 meal. On the flip
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 of the coin, flesh contains some detrimental substances, apart from the crucial building material and nutrients.
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, mammals are given antibiotics today.
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, the most dreadful
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 is a fair amount of saturated fats in animal-based products, which are considered to be a cause of inflammation and
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 of various
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cardiovascular
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 diseases. If
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 not enough,
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 numerous research immoderate consumption of meat-based food is associated with a higher risk of gout developing. Another argument in
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 of veganism and vegetarianism is that nutritionists have estimated that some plant-based products are rich in essential
amino-acids
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amino acids
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 too, and the set just as
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proportion
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 to animal-based products.
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, Vitamin B12 can be
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 produced by special bacteria in our guts. In conclusion,
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 it is a personal matter for everyone whether to eat meat or not, the diet must be well-balanced.
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, plant-based food has more advantages
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 animal-based one in
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regard
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to
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healthy
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a healthy
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life style
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lifestyle
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.

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task achievement
You provided a well-rounded discussion on both sides of the argument, however, you could improve your task response by making your own viewpoint clearer and supporting it with specific examples or studies.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay with clearer paragraphs. You can separate the introduction and conclusion more distinctly from the main body. Also, transitions between your points can be smoother.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the essay.
task achievement
You provided a balanced discussion by presenting both sides of the argument.

Your opinion

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