The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart describes visitors' purposes for going to Orange City in 2017,2020, and
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the prediction for 2030. In general, the
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of visitors has increased over the past few years and it is predicted the figure will grow constantly in the future. Of all activities, the sporting events have been favourable to the majority of people. About 150000 athletic lovers visited the stadium in 2017.
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, it climbed up to over 150000 and the figure in 2030 is forecasted to rise up and it will be larger than in 2020.
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the statistics of people who love the
theater
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,
this
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kind of pastime is the least popular with tourists with probably a
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10000, and it became slightly larger after three years.
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, there will be a substantial increase in visits in 2030 with a
number
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nearly equivalent to 50000.
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, few people chose to attend concerts in 2017 and 2020.
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, the figures are larger than the cinema's.
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, the concert is projected to attract plenty of music lovers and
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, the
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will rocket up to over 100000.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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